Reflective
Journal 4: Reflect on the societal problems faced by China and America. (Hint:
you must definitely explain your responses to these societal problems.
How can they be resolved? Who should be responsible for resolving these
issues?)
Last year, I travelled to the city of Xi'an, China, for a
holiday. During my visit there, I remembered
a group of businessmen at a famous seafood restaurant ordering some of the most
expensive items, amongst which was a large platter of pan-fried abalone. Later,
after alighting from a coach ride to the countryside, I also recalled being repeatedly
chased by groups of beggars trying to sell me something I have not even heard
of, for "just 1 Yuan!". In
that short span of time, it was as if the societal
problem of growing income disparity in China became visible. In my
opinion, this is a problem because inequality fosters political instability,
stemming from the resentment by people who are in the lower percentile.
However, I do empathise
with this group of discontented people.
In any
modern society, rural workers earn less than their urban counterparts. Although this is normal as
there is a need to differentiate the pay of these two groups of people, this
difference should be minimised, since they are all part of the human race and
should be treated similarly. Hence, it is saddening to learn that China is treating
them so differently, to the point that urban workers get up to four times the pay of
rural workers. Being humans, these rural workers have feelings. Instinctively,
they want to enjoy the same privileges as everybody else, and as such, when
they realise their incomes are so different from the rest, it only provokes their
emotions, and it is understandable that this leads to social unrests. Nonetheless,
this is a pressing societal challenge that requires immediate attention.
To
solve this societal problem, I feel that China should make their tax gradient
steeper, so that the rich face heavier taxes while the poor face reduced taxes.
Based on my reasoning, this is because a large part of government expenditures
are used to protect the people, such as law enforcement and the military. Therefore,
those with the most to protect should pay their fair share for the protection.
However,
the real problem which stifles its implementation actually arises from the poor
reception of this policy by the elite who have the most power and say in
corrupt China. If only the elite would stop thinking about personal benefits
and spare a thought about the welfare of others, I believe this policy can be readily
implemented to alleviate this problem. Therefore, I feel that resolving this
problem is the responsibility of the elite as a whole.
Now, let us shift our focus onto the societal
problems faced by the country on the other side of the world. Last November, I entered
the keywords "American violence" into the Google search engine out of
curiosity. Exactly what would I find? It was not surprising really, as it was yet
another article on how a victim, Ann-Marie McKittrick, suffered from an assault by her husband.
America
is getting notorious for violence.
Studies
prove my personal belief right; there is a strong correlation between a
country’s reputation and people’s willingness to visit, invest, study, live, or work there. Violence
in America is a societal problem because it strikes fear into the hearts and
minds of the people, and more importantly, because it challenges the reputation
of American society as the pinnacle of human achievement.
In my opinion, I feel that the prevalence of
violence in America originates from the development of a materialistic mindset,
and the philosophical abandonment by the intellectual elite of the late 20th
Century. As American society becomes increasingly
material centred, they spend less time on what researches indicates truly makes
people happy, like family, friendship, and religion, which leads to a higher
risk of depression and anxiety. I feel
that this state of mind is the main reason why crimes are committed.However, unlike the previous solution to income disparity, societal violence cannot be eliminated by cosmetic societal changes or by quixotic political campaigns. This is because we are dealing with human emotions, motifs, and feelings that cannot be quantified or reasoned in its true essence. Try as one might, I feel it is impossible to create a reliable and effective method to instil values and morals into people. In fact, I feel that only the natural responsibility of the soul to listen to the voice of god can resolve these challenges. Therefore the only hope is in a radical change of heart by the individuals who make up their nation.
In both the American and Chinese societies, their societal
problems are controversial issues which relates to the life and interaction of their people.
It affects a
staggering 300 million people in America. It affects a whopping 1.3 billion people in China. Can anyone
still afford to ignore it now?(791 words)
Dear Nicholas,
ReplyDeleteI disagree with your point on why income disparity should be solved. You stated that since the poor are still part of the human race, they should all be treated similarly. This is debatable. It is very close to Communism to argue that all people should be equal to the extent where rural workers are treated exactly the same as urban workers. The difference in pay is there for a reason. It provides an incentive for people to strive harder and to drive the economy.
I also disagree on your point that violent crime in America is due to materialism. You have not very clearly provided a link to explain why a materialistic mindset leads to violent crimes. While you have stated it results in a higher risk of depression or anxiety, you have not proven or explained how this is related to violent crimes.
I also feel that while it is difficult to find a reliable method to solve societal violence. However, there are ways to limit it. America's crime rate is far higher than other developed countries. Though the culture plays an important part, America can still learn from the legal system of other countries to increase the deterrence effect and minimise the crime rate. In fact, the government does have influence over culture and morals as it holds sway over education and the media. While there may be limitations on its implementations, I feel that it is not true that there is nothing America can do at all to improve the situation of a high rate of violent crimes.
Sincerely,
Samuel Koh
Hi Nicholas,
ReplyDeleteIt is very evident that you have a unique and interesting style of writing. I enjoyed it and there was a flow and I could understand your points clearly. Also the use of personal examples helped to link the issues discussed in your reflective journal to our lives.
On your point about the poor being discontented as they "instinctively want to enjoy the same privileges as everybody else", which thus stirs emotions and leads to social unrest, I think that it is not about the privileges and luxuries which the rich have, but rather that these poor are barely making ends meet. I think that is the main reason which they are discontented, and from the readings of the factories in China, even though wages are increasing, the wages and working conditions as compared to America or the rich are really quite bad.
As for the solution you proposed, I do agree it would help. But I would like to ask how you would define who is the "rich" and the "poor"? Is it based on income? Will their individual needs (say you have to support a family of five) be factored in? Also, you said that the elite has the ability to resolve this by not bribing the authorities and caring for the poor. But I think that is flawed logic as even if the elite want to bribe the authorities, it is the authorities who have the power to decline this and even do something to counter the immoral acts. Also, the government has the largest role to play as it can coutner this corruption if it takes a firm stance against it, and also care for the poor too. Thus I feel it is not the elites or the rich but the government who has the power to ease the income divide.
As for the point on violence caused by the society being materialistic, I think the argument is not strong as there is no link and it is based on the assumption that Americans are depressed due to a materialistic society and depression will cause high crime rates. I know that there are links and studies which show the correlation between depression and anxiety and crime rates but it is not a well developed point and there are misssing links which I hope could have been filled in.
As for the solution on hoping for a radical change of heart, in my opinion that is a really impractical point which was not very thought out. In my opinion parents and education have the largest roles as they can educate children from young and teach them moral values which will stay with them for life and lower the rate of crime. Also, if there are any bad influences the child is receiving, or if any signs of such behavior is exhibited by the child, these parties being in firsthand contact with the child can tackle this problem immediately before it worsens.
Jiefeng
Dear Nicholas,
ReplyDeleteI commend your effort in adding in personal examples in your reflective journal! I found that it gave your writing a personal voice and it interests the reader (or at least me). The introductory example was the most effective as it acts as a hook to prompt me to read further, and also previews the points you will be covering. Lastly, your content is organized into very neat paragraphs, making your writing coherent and easy to read.
I would like to comment on your point on the prevalence of violence. I found that there is a weak link between “higher risk of depression and anxiety” and why “this state of mind is the main reason why crimes are committed”. Personally, I would like to disagree with this statement. Look at Singapore. Singaporeans are generally anxious and unsatisfied people as raised during Singapore’s General Elections in 2011.. After doing some research, I figured out that Singapore is ranked 49th out of 143 countries in “Happy Planet Index”, which is better than average, but still relatively unhappy as compared to other developed countries. However, Singapore has extremely low crime rates, in fact, one of the lowest in the world. Therefore, by simply quoting Singapore as an example, I disagree with your assumption. I may or may not be correct. However, a little suggestion would be to at least elaborate and back up your points instead of leaving broken, unconnected links.
Instead, I feel that the main cause of violence is the permissive law in America. Due to the over-emphasis on human rights and one’s freedom, certain stringent, but important laws cannot be implemented in America. For example, the use of firearms, guns, drugs, etc. Without laws implemented to ban them, we often see cases of violence, especially in the form of gunning, in and out of schools. In fact, I mentioned in my own reflective journal that:
America has always been known for her high crime rates. Though some statistics have shown a slight decline in crime rates in America recently, crime rates in America are still notably higher than other countries. As of 2012, America has 760 prisoners per 100,000 citizens. That is not just many more than in most other developed countries but seven to ten times as many. Japan has 63 per 100,000, Germany has 90, French has 96, South Korea has 97, and Britain, with a rate among the highest, has 153. The permissiveness of the law extends to schools. In a 2008 survey of high school students, 12% of 18-year-old students reported experiencing “any form of victimization at school” and one in six teachers report having been the victim of violence in or around school.
I believe that the main reason for all these violence is because laws are not held in place to prevent them from happening, thus the crimes are committed repeatedly. Therefore, I would like to raise a new point to you that the cause of violence might not be the state of mind, but rather the permissive discipline in America.
Thank you! I genuinely enjoyed reading your blog!
Regards,
Jing Ling